What are the features of a clear introduction?

It is important when writing the introduction to be clear and concise.

You can do this by checking you writing.

A clear introduction is a high-scoring introduction

I often see issues where introductions are complicated and don’t support the task.

This automatically lowers the Band Score.

A clear and simple introduction sets a clear tone.

Can you find and correct the mistakes in each of the introductions below?

Why do you think people make mistakes in their introductions?

The bar chart illustrates that the trend of call types in the united kingdom for 8 years from 1995 to 2002.
The bar chart compares the figures in terms of minutes spent on telephone calls, splitted into three types.
The bar chart gives information about telephone calls. It is in three types Local, National & International and Mobile call minutes from year 1995 to 2002 in UK.
The graph compares the total using time of 3 call types in the UK over a 7-year period from 1995.
The bar chart presents the amount of phone calls in billion of minutes make in the UK over a period of seven years into the categories of local, national/international and mobile phone calls.

Common introduction errors

I often see such mistakes in IELTS candidates’s work.

Candidates often try to discuss the details of a chart in their introduction rather than the main points, which is both complicated and unnecessary.

To avoid mistakes, keep your introduction simple, just like mine:

The bar chart compares the amount of time spent by people in the UK on three different types of phone call between 1995 and 2002.

If you are interested I have corrected the students’ writing.

You can use my correction service and I will provide useful feedback so you can improve your writing.

I can also do the same for speaking.

The corrected examples from the exercise are

The bar chart illustrates trends of different types of phone calls in the United Kingdom over 8 years from 1995 to 2002.
The bar chart compares figures in terms of the minutes spent on telephone calls and is divided into three types.
The bar chart categorises information regarding four types of telephone call, Local, National & International and Mobile call minutes in the UK between 1995 to 2002.
The graph compares the total usage of 3 call types in the UK over a 7-year period from 1995 to 2002.
The bar chart presents the amount of phone calls from four categories made in billions of minutes in the UK over a period of seven years.

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Jonathan